$12 Billion is pledged to Fight AIDS, TB and Malaria by Donald G. Mc Neil jr.
World wide,
countries are stepping up to donate to the Global Fund to fight AIDS,
Tuberculosis and Malaria, and Dr. Mark R. Dybul, the director of the fund, said
that the 12 billion raised is incredible and shows a growing optimism that the
fund is working and an end is finally in sight. This is actually a very large
increase versus the last fundraiser in 2010 which only resulted in 10.4
billion. The goal of this fundraiser was actually even higher, 15 billion which
would have helped 82% of the people in need. But, the 12 billion still is able
to help 68% of the people in need worldwide. The US is the largest donator out
of all the countries involved and offered to match the other countries donation
1:2, willing to pay a whole 5 billion per year to the fund, but only ended up
paying 4 billion due to the lack of donations from other countries.
The fund
itself has had a large affect on all the branches that it raises money for. Malaria,
the easiest to fight of the three, has dropped to only 650,000 deaths a year
from over a million due to increased funds. About 10 million people with HIV
are now able to receive the antiretroviral drug. And new forms of research can
now continued to find new ways to fight these diseases. The problem still remains;
even with 12 billion more money is still needed to help everyone. Only 68% of
the people in need are helped with the whole 12 billion. The UN needs an
estimated total of 24 billion to fight AIDS alone and as of now is only able to
spend 19 billion in it.
I would
have liked it more if the author had stated less on how much each individual
country donated and more of how this money is help people. I feel as though the
author could have used more specific details on the use of the donated money instead
of just where it came from.
I enjoyed reading this review. Something that I think the author did very well was the use of statistics that gave the review some added information and gave the reader more knowledge. Statistics are especially good for comparisons, which the author used well. Another thing that I think the author did well was the writing of the review itself. The sentences were constructed nicely, flowed well, and transitioned easily. Finally, I think the author did a very good job of giving important background information about the topic.
ReplyDeleteOne thing that I think the author could have done better was cut down on the statistics a bit. I liked that they were there, but there were so many that it was a bit overwhelming. Almost every sentence had one or two numbers or statistics in it, which at some points made the review difficult to read. Another thing that I think the author could have done was give some examples of places in the world where this topic is an issue.
Something that really impressed me was the fact 650,000 die from Malaria each year, and that it used to be over a million! This is a scary fact and something that should, and is, be a big concern in the world.
I think James did a really good job in writing this review. His writing grabbed my attention and was straight to the point. He gave important background information that was key to making this review the way it is. The writing had a nice and easy flow that made it enjoyable to read. I thought it was great how James included some of the statistics the author had given.
ReplyDeleteEven though this review was great, it has some room for improvement. I think if James had included what AIDS, Malaria, Tuberculosis are it would have made the review that much more interesting. If someone doesn’t know what these funds are going to cure why should they be interested? I felt like James didn’t understand what he was writing, his personality didn’t flow through it.
What really shocked me was the amount of people that dye from these diseases. About 650,000 people die from Malaria a year! Before it used to be a million, those are only the cases we know about. I can’t believe that such a sickness could almost kill an entire country!
James did a really good job of telling us what the article was about and he also chose a really good article to write about. Another thing he did really well was explaining how important this money is and how important it is to fight against AIDS, Tuberculosis, and Malaria. Something else he did really well was explaining that this program still needs more funding to help all the people who are being affected by these three diseases.
ReplyDeleteThere are a couple of things that James could work on to make his review better next time. If he focused more on the big picture of countries raising money rather than the fact that the United States is one of the biggest contributors, I think that would make it better. Also he could have made things better by not repeating things as much. Even though him repeating information did get it through our heads, it got a little too repetitive.
One thing I did not know before reading this article was that even though there is 12 billion dollars to help fight aids that money can only help 68% of the worldwide population with AIDS.
James did a very good job at reviewing the article $12 Billion is pledged to Fight AIDS, TB and Malaria by Donald G. McNeil jr. One thing that he did a very good job at was explaining the article and going into detail about how much has been raised. This made the article very easy to understand. He also did a good job at explaining why this mattered to humans and more specifically which diseases needed the most help.
ReplyDeleteThis review was good but there were a couple of things that I would change. First, I think it would have been nice if he went into more detail about which diseases are getting what funds, and what is being done with the money more specifically. Also I think it would have been nice to know a little more background about what the death toll is of the other diseases and things like what the antiretroviral drug does.
This article was very interesting and one thing that I learned was how drastically the annual death toll of malaria has dropped due to all of this funding and this shows that we need to keep fighting these diseases.
James’s review was very well written, and I liked a lot of things he did in it. I think he did great job summarizing all of the key information and not making it run on too long and kept it short and to the point. I also liked how James included the important statistics from the article to really show the importance of it. Lastly, I enjoyed how James made it flow very well and all of the ideas were connected well.
ReplyDeleteI would’ve liked if James included the title and author of the article in the first paragraph of the review. Another thing I didn’t really like was how repetitive it began to get.
I found it astonishing how many people annually die of these diseases, about 650,000 people die from Malaria a year, and I thought that was crazy.
I thought James did a great job of reviewing this article. One thing I liked was that he clearly stated what the focus of the article was and explained the details. Another thing that I liked was that he put the 12 billion dollars in perspective to the amount of money we need to fight these diseases. Finally, I liked that James explained how we still need more money and more fundraising to help everyone who has AIDS, TB, and Malaria. One thing I didn't like about the review was that James didn't really explain why it is so important that we raise money to cure these diseases. They impact so many peoples' lives and I don't think he stressed this enough. Another thing that James could improve on is that there were a few grammar and punctuation errors that could have been avoided. Overall, the review was nicely done and I’m happy to see that our government is contributing so much money to help finding cures.
ReplyDeleteI think James did a really good job presenting his review of his article. He did this by not straying away from the topic at hand and being straight to the point. I also liked how he gave specific details on aspects of his article such as how we would need about 12 billion dollars to fight these diseases and find a cure for them. I also thought he did a good job on explaining why it meant something to the rest of the world because people do not usually enjoy reading article that do not affect them. One thing I did not like was how repetitive James got. He could have made it easier to read if he was not so repetitive. I also thing he could have gone into more detail about I also think he could have given some background information that stated if this epidemic was more severe in different countries.
ReplyDeleteOverall, I really think James's article was very well written and the death toll per year from these diseases just astonishes me and actually scares me a tiny bit.
James did a great job reviewing this article. His writing flowed well and was easy to follow. James also dis a great job summarizing the article which provided vital context for the rest of his review.
ReplyDeleteDespite James's superb writing the review was a bit repetitive. James could also have gone into more detail, for example, James mentions that cases of malaria dropped significantly when more funding was put into preventing malaria yet he does not explain how the new funding has decreased cases.
The topic of this article was a bit daunting and the death totals were very shocking
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ReplyDeleteJames did a great job writing this review. One thing he did very well was add a lot of statistics. Adding all the percentages of people who need help and such really helps the reader understand the severity of the situation. Also this shows that the article is very credible because there is info from scientists. Another thing James did very well was explain what he thought the author could have improved on. I agree with him that the author should have said more on how the money was used instead of where they got it. A reader will enjoy a story more than statistics and info on money. Lastly James used words the reader could understand. He avoided big words that would confuse the reader and would have made the reader stop reading.
ReplyDeleteThere were a few aspects of this review James could have improved on. In the paragraph where he was explaining how it affects the world James just gave more summary. He didn't add any info outside of what the original author said. James could have added his thoughts on what this would do for the world. Another thing he could have done better is give a few more suggestions on what the author could have done better. He could have expanded on his suggestions that he had.
I found this review very interesting. I never knew that these diseases were so severe in our world. Fro example I didn't know over a million people used to die just from malaria. James really brought these problems to my attention and I hope scientists continue trying to solve this issue.