Core chemistry 12/12/14
Current event Olivia Scotti
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The article I read for my current event was A Cape Cod Mystery: a Surge of Stranded Sea Turtles by James Gorman. This article was about how there was an increased amount of turtles that have washed up on the cape cod shore sick. Over the years the number of sea turtles washing up on shore has increased. There are many volunteers who are helping collect these turtles off the beach and bring them to aquariums sanctuaries and many other facilities for help. They have not figured out why so many sea turtles have been washed but they have made some assumptions. Mr. Prescott the director of Massachusetts Audubon’s Wellfleet wildlife sanctuary said “What is known is that they often caught in cape cod bay as do dolphins and whales sometimes because of the shape of the land or the currents and the tides.” The coast guard helped with situation by flying 163 turtles to Florida. They have found 1,200 baby turtles on the beach.
This plays an affect on the world because if the amount of turtles washing up on shore increases then many turtle species could become endangered. This could also affect other animals in the ocean because they’re a major part of the ocean. This does not affect me because my life will not change because of this.
There were many good and bad things about the article. I think they did a good job on incorporating quotes from many different people because you could trust the article. Also you could see what other peoples opinion was on this topic. The article was not to short so you could get a good idea on what this topic is about. Although there were many good things the article had bad things like the organization. One thing that could improve this article is more information on the treatment the turtles are going through to get better.
In Olivia’s review of the article, A Cape Cod Mystery: a Surge of Stranded Sea Turtles by James Gorman, Olivia did a good job summarizing the article. In this article there was a major increase of the amount of turtles that washed up on cape code’d shore. One thing that Olivia did well was give information from reachers, like Mr. Prescott the director of Massachusetts Audubon’s Wellfleet wildlife sanctuary. Another thing Olivia did well was give a good summery on the article. She gave us information on the past and why might sea turtle have been washing up. Another aspect I thought Olivia did well was choosing the article. It was a different article then what most people would have chosen and it was interesting to read. One aspect Olivia could have touched upon was put more information that could have made the turtle get better. Another aspect that Olivia could have done better was add more information on how this is relevant to society. Overall Olivia did a very good job revving this article.
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ReplyDeleteGorman, James. "Cape Cod Mystery: Surge of Stranded Turtles." The New York Times. The
New York Times, 12 Dec. 2014. Web. 12 Dec. 2014.
Overall, Olivia did a very nice job reviewing her article on the sea turtles washing up in Cape Cod. Her summary was very short and concise, yet still gave the reader good background information to understand the article. Also, she incorporated a quote, which was very useful for the reader. I was able to hear an outside opinion on the issue. Finally, Olivia did a very nice job connecting the topic back to society. She provided the reader with her own opinions about how this event could have an impact on society, yet still stayed honest and said that she did not think that it would be a huge impact on her personal life. Olivia did a very good job on her review, but she could have improved on some things. Although she got her point across, her vocabulary was not very strong and could have been expanded. There were no complex sentences that engaged the reader and impressed them. In addition, I thought that her punctuation could have been improved. There were a few sentences where commas were needed to make sense of the sentence. I was truly impressed with her topic choice and found it fascinating that turtles could possibly become extinct! I hope to keep learning about this possible extinction and was very fascinated by Olivia’s review.
I really enjoyed Olivia's article: it covered a topic that is very rarely covered on the blog, and she did it in a unique way. I would have revamped a lot of the punctuation, maybe added some more engaging sentences, but Olivia's current event managed to drive the point home in a way that anyone can understand. Turtles are very sensitive to their environment, with the destruction of their nesting beaches, pollution, and the ever-growing demand for turtle soup greatly impacting their populations. It's nice to know that someone else is seeing what endangered animals are going through and commenting on it.
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New York Times, 12 Dec. 2014. Web. 12 Dec. 2014.
I read a review on an article that Olivia read called A Cape Cod Mystery: a Surge of Stranded Sea Turtles written by James Gorman. In her review Olivia did a good job of was delivering information. In the review she includes a quote and many facts. This information not only gives the reader more facts but it makes the article more interesting. In the review Olivia also did a good job of critiquing the article and saying the pros, cons, and improvement the author could have made. A final think that Olivia did a good job of was organizing the article. I knew what the article and paragraphs were about from the start to end. The good organization made the reading much better.
In the review Olivia could have expanded more on some of the facts with and opinion of her own or that of an expert. For example, she said “They have found 1,200 baby turtles on the beach,” and ended the paragraph which made me think about who and were this was. If she had added another sentence it would sound and read a lot better. Another way Olivia could have improved was adding why the turtles will not affect her and why this will affect the ocean. She just says the facts without explanation and adding why would have made the article much more interesting to the reader.
After reading the review I thought that it is really sad that turtles are dying. I also thought that it was amazing how the animals are trapped in the CC bay currents.
Drew Judkins December 18, 2014
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Gorman, James. "Cape Cod Mystery: A Surge of Stranded Turtles." The New York Times. The
New York Times, 12 Dec. 2014. Web. 12 Dec. 2014.
I read Olivia Scotti’s review of the article Cape Cod Mystery: A Surge of Stranded Turtles. The first thing that I liked about Olivia’s review is what she said the article could have done better because I agree that their should have been more information on the treatment the turtles are getting to help get them rehabilitated to the ocean. The second thing I liked about Olivia’s review is her use of a direct quote. In my opinion she used the most important quote from the article. Finally I think Olivia did a nice job relaying direct facts from the article such as, “the coast guard helped with the situation by flying 163 turtles to Florida”.
The first area of improvement I think Olivia could make in her review would be to check some of the facts she stated in her review. She states that the turtles are sick, but really they are just stranded and cold. The other area of improvement would be to proof read to check for mistakes.
I really enjoyed the article. It is different than any of the other articles I have read for the chemistry blog so far. I especially liked that it was not about Ebola. I really like sea turtles and I hope they figure out the problem, or at least are able to help get all of the turtles back to the ocean. This will not necessarily change my life, but if one turtle species becomes more endangered or even extinct it will not be good for the ecosystem.
Gorman, James. "Cape Cod Mystery: A Surge of Stranded Turtles." The New York Times. The New York Times, 12 Dec. 2014. Web. 15 Jan. 2015. .
ReplyDeleteIn Olivia’s review of the article, there were some good and bad aspects. She did a good job of summarizing the article. Although it was brief, I was able to understand what the article was about. Olivia also did a good job on providing a thorough critique of the article. After each claim, she gave an example to support it. In addition, Olivia did a good job on relating it to the world and how this problem could eventually lead to turtles becoming endangered. On the other hand, she could have explained why turtles becoming endangered would be a problem. For example, she could’ve stated this would affect marine life because turtles are an important part of the food chain. Another thing Olivia could’ve improved was elaborating on some of her sentences to make the whole review more engaging. Overall, I was surprised to learn many turtles are starting to be in bad health conditions and are getting flown to Florida.