I read the article NY doctor recently back from West Africa tests positive for Ebola,
officials confirm, by Ray
Sanchez and Shimon Prokupecz. In this article, a doctor who recently returned
from Africa was diagnosed with Ebola. Craig Spencer was the doctor. He had come
home to NYC after a visit in Africa to help treat people with Ebola, and
reported a fever a day or so ago. He had not felt ant symptoms on the journey
back from Africa, but started feeling bad soon after arriving in New York City.
His health was being monitored so he contacted the doctors immediately after he
started feeling bad. He was taken to the hospital where he has been quarantined.
He is thought to only have come in contact with 4 people since feeling the
symptoms, so those 4 people have been contacted as well.
This
article is very significant to the people who live in Bronxville. New York City
is less than a half hour from here, so it is very dangerous and scary indeed
that Ebola is so close. People need to be aware of what is happening so they
can prepare and be ready for the worst. It is not likely for Ebola to spread,
but it is not out of the question. They aren’t 100% sure about all the people
he came in contact with, so there is still danger out there. While it isn’t
likely that Ebola will spread to Bronxville, it is very close and could harm
many more people if not contained in one place. Once it gets out there in the
public, there is no stopping it.
This
article was very informative, but it kind of just let people know what was
happening. It didn’t really provide a ton of insight or detail ad to what was
actually happening. I thought the authors could have told us a little bit more
about the doctor who came down with Ebola and what he was doing in Africa,
because that is where he got the sickness from. I thought they should have
described his work there and who else was with him. This would have told us a
little bit more as to how he got the sickness. Also, there could have been more
on how he was being treated and what precautions were being taken. Like I said
before, the article just sort of said what was happening, and there was not a
ton of detail. What is being done to the people he came in contact with? What
are we doing for him to treat him? These are some big questions that I think
needed answering in this article. I think more detail could have been added in
many places, but these are some of the ones that stuck out to me.
After reading Alston Tarry’s current event response, I found some things that were well presented and some things that could improve. For example for something that was well presented, I liked how Alston in the second paragraph stated the significance of this article to the people living in Bronxville. Relating the article to people who happen to be reading a response, in which relates to them somehow, concerns them and makes them want to read more about the topic. Also, another thing Alston did well was he made his article sound good. He had correct grammar, and allowed the writing to flow. Doing this makes it easier for the reader to understand your response. Lastly, another thing Alston did well in his response was he stayed away from repeating himself. Like Alston said, his article didn’t provide much detail. So, for him to write well written paragraphs impressed me.
ReplyDeleteIn Alston’s article, there were some things that could improve. For example, I think that Alston could’ve added a quote from the article, so that the reader of the response not only has an idea of what Alston’s thinks, but also something about the writer of the article thinks. I also think that Alston could’ve added some more detail to his response. Like Alston said, his article did not include that much information and detail but I think there could be other ways to add more information. For example, you could add a quote and explain what you think that quote means in your opinion. Otherwise, I think that Alston’s article was very well written.
One thing in Alston’s article that interested me was how he said how he felt about Ebola being in New York. For example, he said “New York City is less than a half hour from here, so it is very dangerous and scary indeed that Ebola is so close.” This sentence makes me scared and makes me start to worry and think about if Ebola really does come to New York and if I really have a chance of getting Ebola. It makes me think about things I would never think about if this didn’t concern me. I really enjoyed reading Laura Alston’s current event.
Alston choose to review a topic that really stuck out from all of the others. I truly enjoyed reading his review and thought that it was the most relevant to what is happening in the world right now. His topic was the most important in my opinion and I thought that he presented the issue well. His summary completely summarized the entire article in a simple description. He included just enough details to explain the problem. I had already heard about this event, but was excited to learn more. Also, I thought that he did good job connecting the problem back to Bronxville and the reader’s lives. By doing so, I was able to relate to the article and want to read on. In addition, his review had a good flow to it. He used transition words that made his writing sound less choppy, making it easier to read and interpret.
ReplyDeleteWhile Alston did a great job presenting the information, I think that by adding in a little more detail on the medical standings of the patient could have been helpful. I am not sure if this was possible, as he said that there was not much information in the article. In addition, adding a quote to his review could have been a good way to bring in more information. Nowhere in the article was there a quote or passage taken directly from the article. This could have been helpful for the reader in providing them with more details.
I believe that Alston did a great job in his review and presented his information well. He says that New York City is so close to Bronxville, which makes me worry even more. Both of my parents work in medicine in New York City, so we have talked about this issue at the dinner table multiple times. This issue seems to keep on coming up. What if Ebola comes to Bronxville?
Alston gave a good review of this article about Ebola spreading even more to US. One aspect I enjoyed was that he provided necessary background information about this incident, and even included that Craig had come in contact with four people since feeling the symptoms. Another impressive component is that Alston connected this issue right to our town of Bronxville, as this epidemic has reached as far as New York City. This is quite alarming, as Bronxville is only 20 minutes from Manhattan. A third thing I liked about Alston's review was how he said that the author did a good drive describing what happened to the doctor, but not a good job explaining what is happening with Ebola in Africa.
ReplyDeleteOne aspect of his review that could be improved was only he included good background on the incident, background on what Craig Spencer was doing in Africa, and how he got Ebola. A second component that could be improved was a more sense of flow to the article, as it kept switching between vague ideas or descriptions. No statistics were given. The most impressive part of this article was again how Alston connected Ebola reaching NYC to Bronxville. If this epidemic were to reach our town, I truly have no idea what I would do. Would school even keep going? Although extended vacations never hurt, Ebola cannot reach Bronxville.