Rising Sea Temperatures could Destroy an Ecosystem
Nagano, Yuriko. "Growing Coral to Keep a Sea Claim Above Water." The New York Times. The New
York Times, 19 Nov. 2014. Web. 20 Nov. 2014.
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ea-claim-above-water.html?ref=science&_r=0>.
Out off the coast of Japan, there are a string of islands, holding precious ecosystems within them. One of the most famous of them is the Okinotori island. It surrounds a beautiful reef, but because of global warming, this reef has already been harmed because of the warming temperatures of the ocean. Although most of these islands are suffering from global warming, scientists have chosen to pick this island, and so far they have spent about $19 million on research. The researcher’s biggest problem is with the coral, because if the coral is hurt, then the whole ecosystem is thrown off. This is why the Japanese have chosen to focus their efforts on reproducing coral, which is a very, very challenging task to take on. Out of all of the coral they have tried to reproduce, only 20% have been successful, but researchers still believe there is a possibility to grow coral asexually, which they hope will be ultimately successful.
This article definitely raised my awareness about the problems of rising sea temperatures. Before I had read this article, I had never even heard about what the Okinotori reef was, and how important it is to protecting wildlife out off of the coast of Japan. Although there are no human inhabitants of the island, there are thousands of fish of all different kinds that would lose their homes if this reef disappears, which it could in 30 years if something is not done about the coral that is being harmed. I could never imagine that what I was doing here in Bronxville, could ultimately affect the fate of fish in Japan before I discovered this article.
I thought that overall the article was organized in a way that made the reader engaged. The article flowed easily from beginning to end, and the paragraphs were short but still included what was necessary to move the story along. In the end, the author shocked us and called the readers to act with a quote from one of the researchers on the project that said, “There may be no Okinotori island 30 years from now due to effects from global warming...We need to step up efforts to protect the reef more if we want to keep the area as Japan’s.” The only true critique I had for the author of this article was that he should only include a quote, if words can not be said better by himself. This is because besides the quote I mentioned before, the quotes only said facts stated by a researcher that could have been compiled into one sentence by the author.By Claire Kraemer
I read Claire’s comment on “Growing Coral to Keep a Sea Claim Above Water”. I thought that overall Claire did a really good job reviewing this article. One thing I really liked was why how Claire explained why this Okinotori coral reef in Japan is so important to the ecosystem. I also liked how Claire explained how this affected us, or more important how we have affected this coral reef. Claire talked about how everyone in Bronxville can have an effect on Okinotori. One final thing I liked was how Claire included statistics from the article. This makes the article seem more legit and backs up the information with proof.
ReplyDeleteAlthough I thought that Claire did a good job overall, there were some parts I thought she could improve. One thing she could have improved was her introduction. She started the review out with a summary, but she should’ve had some kind of topic sentence or introduction. This made the beginning confusing. Another thing that Claire could have improved on was she could have explained why global warming was destroying the reef. She said that the reef harmed Okinotori, but didn’t say why exactly.
One thing I found amazing about the article was how the article talked about what global warming was doing to Okinotori. The article said, “There may be no Okinotori island 30 years from now due to the effects from global warming.” This amazed me because I didn’t realize global warming would have an effect on the near future. I also thought it was amazing that global warming could end up destroying coral reefs. In conclusion, I believed that Claire’s review and Yukiro Nagano’s article were both written very well.
Claire Kraemer wrote a summary on the "Growing Coral to Keep a Sea Claim Above Water,” from The New York Times by Nagano, Yuriko. The situation in the Okinotori reef is that global warming is causing the sea temperatures to rise and killing the coral, throwing off the whole ecosystem. One aspect of this summary I liked was that Claire gave her opinion on multiple topics. These included the issue of the effect of our actions taken in Bronxville on the reef. Claire also said that the article helped her learn a lot about the coral reefs, information that she was not aware of before. One other thing I liked about Claire’s summary was that she gave countless facts about the island’s suffering, how much money it costs to make repairs and so on. Another thing I liked was that she included what will happen in the future if changes aren’t made to fix the issue due to global warming. The effect that might take place from global warming and rising sea temperatures will be that Okinotori reef will be gone in approximately 30 years. One thing I think Claire could have added to her summary was more quotes from the article. I think that quotes help give the reader different perspectives and overall a better understanding of the situation. Another thing that could be added to improve the quality of the summary would be to give more detail specifically on what people could do to help stop the sea temperature from rising and save the Okinotori reef. One fact from the summary that interested me was that scientists have already spent $19 million on research. Overall, I think Claire’s summary was informative and helped people realize an issue that is not well known but can be fixed with the help of everybody around the world.
ReplyDeleteI read Claire’s review of the article Growing Coral to Keep a Sea Calm Above Water. One thing I like about the review is that she gave a good suggestion about how the article could be better. A second thing I liked was that she really discussed why she chose this article and how it affected her. The final thing I liked about Claire’s review is that she gave direct facts from the article.
ReplyDeleteOne thing Claire could have done better is to describe what would happen if the ecosystem is destroyed. She also didn’t mention the fact that Japan will lose control of that section of the ocean if the islands disappear.
Unlike Claire, I liked how the author gave many factual quotes from experts.
By Drew Judkins
"Bronxville HS Core Chemistry." Bronxville HS Core Chemistry. N.p., 20 Nov. 2014. Web. 22 Nov. 2014.
ReplyDeleteAfter reading the current events response by Claire Kraemar, I have a few thoughts about some things that were good and other things that needed work in her response. One thing that she did well was she explained the importance of the coral. For example, she stated that “The researchers biggest problem is with the coral because if the coral is hurt, then the whole ecosystem is thrown off.” This example that Claire provides really shows how important the coral is. Another thing that I thought Claire did well was she gave a very good explanation of why she chose this article and how its important to us. Lastly, another thing Claire did well was she made her response sound good. She had correct punctuation, grammar, and she also made her response flow really well.
In Claire’s article, there were some things that could improve. For example, she could have added another quote throughout her response somewhere. Providing quotes can help the reader not only what you think about the article, but what the author thinks of the article. Also another thing Claire could have done better was provide an introduction sentence or two. Providing a sentence or two could help the reader be pulled into the response and it could make the reader interested in reading the response. Otherwise, I think Claire did a very good job on her response.
One thing in Claire’s response that surprised me was how important the coral reef was and how important it is to protecting wildlife out off the coast of Japan. If the coral reef ever happens to be destroyed, it could affect a lot of wildlife. Before I read Claire’s current event response I didn't know lots of information that she provided. I really enjoyed reading Claire’s current event response.
By Ava Austi
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ReplyDeleteAfter reading claire's current event's article, I though that it was very good, and gave a good and clear understanding on what the article was about. I really like how she explained where this Coral reef was located. If I hadn't known, I would have been confused throughout her review. I would have been asking myself questions like, is it located in the Caribbean, Mexico, Australia? second aspect that I like about her review was how she stated how much mone is being spent for this research. This was very important to put in. By telling us how much money was spent, we can tell that so far, a lot of research has already been done and that scientists are become more intrigued. The last thing that I like about her article is how she said how much of the research has been successful. Since only 20% was successful, this shows that the researchers still have a long way to go. Even though her review was good overall there are still things that she could have included. I am sure that there were quotes in her article. I think that she could have included some in her review so we could get a better way of seeing what scientist's thoughts are and how they are going to try and increase the rate of how successful their experiment's are. A second thing that she could have improved on is how the coral was being harmed. I know that global warming is hurting it, but what part of the coral is being hurt the most. This would have helped me have gotten a better understanding on how bad this situation is and how important it is for people to start helping our environment. Before we know it, in a couple of years, specific species, plants, or animals won't exist anymore because of the way we harm our environment. Lastly, when reading the article, something really surprised me. When reading Claire's summary, I was surprised to read that in 30 years or so, because of global warming, these islands may not exist anymore! I didn't think that the islands would disappear in 3 decades. People need to start taking action fast. These islands could have been a sort of habitat to the animals, or fish living near that area and now it will be destroyed. Also, a precious part of these islands is deteriorating quickly and people need to help stop this global warming from risking other islands, or nature to disappear or become extinct. Overall, I really like Claire's article and she did a good job!
ReplyDeleteNagano, Yuriko. "Growing Coral to Keep a Sea Claim Above Water." The New York Times. The New
York Times, 19 Nov. 2014. Web. 20 Nov. 2014.
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I read Claire’s review on "Growing Coral to Keep a Sea Claim Above Water" by Nagano, Yuriko. One thing that I liked about this review was how she explained about Okinotori island and why was this island chosen. I think the explanation made a lot easier to understand the article and less confusion. Second thing that I like was that she brought in her personal connection to the article. She explain that how will it affected on Bronxville. Last thing that I like was how she explain about coral and how she puts a lot of specific information from the article and this makes us to think about how this is very important. Also there were things that could improve. For example, she mention that if the coral is hurt, then the whole ecosystem is thrown off but she didn't explain why. Also she didn't put any quotes. The quotes may helped us more easy to understand. I learned that the global warming affect a lot already and I thought that the people needs to think about it more deeply.
ReplyDeleteNagano, Yuriko. "Growing Coral to Keep a Sea Claim Above Water." The New York Times. The New
York Times, 19 Nov. 2014. Web. 20 Nov. 2014.