Gigi Pennoyer Measles:
Perilous but Preventable
Chemistry Current Event By:
Denise Grady
Grady, Denise. "Measles:
Perilous but Preventable." Well Measles Perilous but Preventable
Comments. N.p., 02 Feb. 2015. Web. 05 Feb. 2015.
This article is about measles and how the number of cases of it
in the U.S. has risen recently. Measles is a common and serious infection. The
symptoms include a fever, cough, and rash. In 2000, measles became a disease
that no longer originated in the United States, but there are still many cases
of it. Measles is highly contagious. In the article it says that some people
who have it can pass it on to 20 people. There is a vaccine available for it
that you get twice, once when you are 12- 15 months old and one when your are
4-6, but some people have concerns about it. One of the reasons it is such a
serious infection is because it can lead to other things such as pneumonia and
encephalitis, which can lead to death. Babies and young children are the most vulnerable,
and they specifically are more prone to their infection leading to further
complications. Measles is also specifically harmful to pregnant women because
it can increase the chance of its baby being born with complications.
Measles directly
affects humanity. It is a disease that kills many people each year, and this
article is good because it raises awareness of measles. This article also may
encourage people to get the measles vaccine. Everyone in my family has gotten
the measles vaccine and this prevented us from getting the measles. This
article tells you how important it is to get the vaccine.
I think this article was written very well. It
had most of the information that someone would want to know about measles. One
thing in specific that I really liked about this article was that at the end it
had commonly asked questions about measles and it answered them for you. The
Q&A made this article very informational, which is a very good thing. One
thing this article lacked was the symptoms of measles. I think knowing the
symptoms of measles is essential to know if your are going to know all other
information about measles.
Gigi did a great job with her current event article. Her piece was about the spread of measles in the United States. This spread is because of people who refuse to give their children the vaccination. In her review, she very logically explained what measles was and how it affected you, including many statistics on what measles is, which was a great way for me to understand this disease more clearly. Much of the time in proper writing, you shouldn’t use personal pronouns, but I think that her talking about the fact that she got it as a child was beneficial to her article. I think that her critique was thorough, still accounting for the good in this piece and highlighting some of her favorite parts, which makes it like I was reading the article myself, which I really liked. With all due respect to all of the good in this piece, I think that she could have made the piece flow a little more, making the ideas more fluid between paragraphs. I also think that she should have picked a side and been biased, because from my understanding it was a biased article. Her statistics in the beginning really showed me what a serious disease measles was, and I never knew it could kill you. For all of my life (probably measles wasn’t prominent) I thought measles was nothing more than a common cold.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how Gigi highlighted all the interesting and important parts of her article in her summary, without including unnecessary details. I liked how in her second paragraph Gigi talked about how her entire family has gotten the measles’ vaccine, proving its relevance today. I liked how she talked about how the Q & A section of the article was helpful to her, proving that she paid attention to not only the content of her article, but also the devices the author used.
ReplyDeleteGigi could have explained why people may chose not to get the measles’ vaccine, are there any side- affects? She could have also included more statistics proving the danger of the measles’, and how and why the vaccine makes a difference.
This article taught me that the measles could be fatal. Before reading it I thought measles was a very minor disease, which could easily be diagnosed and cured.
I think that Gigi did a very good job at analyzing this article without mentioning unimportant facts that the reader wouldn’t be interested in. Her piece was about the spread of measles in the United States. This spread is because of people who refuse to give their children the vaccination. Gigi did a very good job at including statistics. These statistics really helped tie in the whole message of the paragraph and inform the people just how bad measles can get. You can talk about how bad something is but i think that including numbers like she did made things more drastic. In her analyzation, i think that Gigi could have made her ideas flow better. At some points when i was reading i had to go back and read the sentence again because they weren't fluid. Another thing that Gigi could have done differently is to choose a side. I know that she said she got vaccinations but i wish she were more clear about what could happen if you didn’t. A little bit more detail on the opposite side of the article would have been beneficial. Before reading this article i did not think that you would die from measles nor did i think that it was a fatal disease. I thought that measles was a type of sickness that could be diagnosed and cured.
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