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Wednesday, October 7, 2009
Southeast Asian Droughts
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The article I chose to write about is the droughts that are happening in Southeast Asia. One of the major problems is that Southeast Asia is so over-populated, there isn’t enough water to go around. Another problem is that some scientists say that the climate of Southeast Asia affects the amount of water they will have and the warmer Asia is, the wetter it is.
In the article the government and some professors did not state many ideas on how they planned to fix the drought, but one of the ways they did mention is to start making reservoirs.
One of the major problems for Southeast Asia is that the government is not taking control of the situation and fixing the problem which is small now but can turn into something a lot bigger.
One way that these droughts can affect the world is when Southeast Asia is in a drought situation it means many supplies, like crops, that are exported to other countries or continents may not be delivered and can cause hunger in other parts of the world.
I think that this article is poorly written because it doesn’t say enough about what Southeast Asia is doing to try and fix the draught problem.
I think that one of the things this article does do well is highlight the recent drought problems that Southeast Asia has had.
3) Jesse clearly stated many things. the problem in the article. The problem was droughts in South East Asia. He gave an example to solve the problem. The solution is create reservoirs. The review said how the problem affects America. The affect was a limited South East Asia exports to America. Second, the review was grammatical error free. I was pleased to see this, because my review would have typos. Finally, the format of the review was organized. Each paragraph had a specific purpose. 2) An improvement is to clarify how the amount of water is dependent on the weather. It was confusing how the hotter it is the more water will apear.A final improvement is to state which countries in South East Asia are affected by the drought. Is this China, Japan or Mongolia? 1) I was struck about the devistation of the drought. Before Jesse's review, I was ignorant of the devistating drought.
I thought Jesse’s report was very clear and to the point. I liked how each paragraph was about a specific topic, which was easily shown by the topic sentences. Next I also liked how the first thing he did was clearly states the problem and then from there elaborate on it. Lastly I liked how there was nothing spelled wrong because a lot of the articles I’ve read have a lot of misspelling or grammatical errors. Overall it was a good review but there were some things that could have been improved. For example He could have been clearer about the location of where the drought is happening. Instead of just saying South East Asia he could have said the exact countries. Another thing he could have done more of was using more specific examples instead of just broad ideas. I was horrified when I read this that such damage could be caused from a drought; I think Jesse did a very good job capturing the what happened and how we can help.
3) Jesse clearly stated many things. the problem in the article. The problem was droughts in South East Asia. He gave an example to solve the problem. The solution is create reservoirs. The review said how the problem affects America. The affect was a limited South East Asia exports to America. Second, the review was grammatical error free. I was pleased to see this, because my review would have typos. Finally, the format of the review was organized. Each paragraph had a specific purpose.
ReplyDelete2) An improvement is to clarify how the amount of water is dependent on the weather. It was confusing how the hotter it is the more water will apear.A final improvement is to state which countries in South East Asia are affected by the drought. Is this China, Japan or Mongolia?
1) I was struck about the devistation of the drought. Before Jesse's review, I was ignorant of the devistating drought.
I thought Jesse’s report was very clear and to the point. I liked how each paragraph was about a specific topic, which was easily shown by the topic sentences. Next I also liked how the first thing he did was clearly states the problem and then from there elaborate on it. Lastly I liked how there was nothing spelled wrong because a lot of the articles I’ve read have a lot of misspelling or grammatical errors.
ReplyDeleteOverall it was a good review but there were some things that could have been improved. For example He could have been clearer about the location of where the drought is happening. Instead of just saying South East Asia he could have said the exact countries. Another thing he could have done more of was using more specific examples instead of just broad ideas.
I was horrified when I read this that such damage could be caused from a drought; I think Jesse did a very good job capturing the what happened and how we can help.