Cincinnati Children's Hospital Medical Center (2009, November 23). Exposure to lead, tobacco smoke raises risk of ADHD. ScienceDaily. Retrieved November 24, 2009, from http://www.sciencedaily.com /releases/2009/11/091123083652.htm
This article is about how exposure to tobacco and lead can lead to ADHD in children. A study done shows that prenatal exposure to tobacco can drastically raise the chances of a child getting ADHD. With lead exposure the odds are raised even more. The research shows that a child has eight times the chance of getting the disorder if they have had exposure to both lead and smoke before. The researches also concluded that younger children, even after they are born are more likely to get ADHD then children who aren’t.
I think this is a very important study. Second hand smoke kills, but it can also effect the daily lives of children. I think parents should be more responsible about smoking around children and pregnant woman. ADHD can cause children to have trouble paying attention, which could affect their grades, so without the disorder their lives would be much easer. I think it is very important that everyone is informed about these studies, because if they learn from them they could help prevent the disorder in their children.
I thought this was a very well written article. The author was very clear and put in a lot of evidence to prove his point. Also this article kept my attention with ought using too complicated vocabulary words, or running on for to long. To improve this article, the author could have been more clear on a few points and could have described what ADHD was.
There are many components to this article that are well presented. For one, Jackie had written it very well. In all it was very short and got strait to the point. Along with her good writing style she included some key facts from the article. For example “A child would have 8 times more of a chance of getting ADHD if exposed to smoke and lead. Her views about this topic were also very well thought out and seemed like she was very interested. This article is great, but it still has a couple of things that fall through the cracks. There are a few things that she failed to include. I would like to know the ways how a parent could give their child ADHD. Was smoking one of them? It was not really clear. Secondly I thought her article was a little thin, it needed some more detail. Overall I thought Jackie did a great job!
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ReplyDeleteThis was a well written review. She clearly displayed the point of the article and showed the statistics that this article based its research upon. She also discussed the problems that come with ADHD.
I would have liked it if she had explained why exposure to smoke and lead lead to a higher chance of a child having ADHD. It also would have been interesting to learn at what age does exposure to lead not lead to a higher chance of ADHD.
I was very interested in the whole point of this article, since I would have never guessed that smoke exposure and ADHD would be linked
Jackie obviously put a lot of thought into her review. it is quiet clear that she spent some time on organizing it. I also agree with her in the fact that people need to be more informed about second hand smoke because not only does it kill but research has shown that it has other effects as well.
ReplyDeleteOne way to make this review even better is if she eleaborated on why exposer to smoke and lead caauses ADHD. i know she said that the article didnt explain much but i would really like to know. overall i just wish there was a little more information in the review.
like i said before something that i learned from this article was not only does smoking and lead poisoning kill but it now has side effects to offspring. I've always hated the smell of smoke which is why i try to avoid it but sometimes i cant and i don't want it to effect me even when im not doing anything wrong.
Allison Cane December 2, 2009
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Jackie’s article, Exposure to lead, tobacco smoke raises risk of ADHD, was very well written. One thing she did well in her review was using a big font. This was helpful as a reader because it caught my attention and helped keep my attention. Another thing she did was bringing in outside information. She said that secondhand smoke kills, and is even worse now that it can lead to ADHD. One last thing she did was using enough details. She didn’t use to many. One thing that Jackie could improve in her review would be by adding more information about what ADHD is. Something else she could do is explain the ways kids are exposed to lead. One thing that I learned from reading this review is that a child has eight times the chance of getting ADHD if they have had exposure to both lead and smoke before.
I read Jackie’s article called, “Exposure to lead, tobacco smoke raise risk of ADHD.” I thought Jackie wrote this article very well, it was short and was right to the point. Jackie omitted any information that was unnecessary and only included the main points from the article.
ReplyDeleteOne thing I would recommend to do is to explain how the smoke creates a higher chance of a child having ADHD. What components are within lead that would make a child prone to getting ADHD? Another thing I would say to improve it is to explain a little further what ADHD is.
I learned from this review that not only does smoking kill but it also has an effect on children, so they have to suffer for something that they don’t even do themselves.