Evelyn Kluemper
May 11, 2015
Current Event 10
Grady, Denise. "After Nearly Claiming His
Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye." The New York Times. The New
York Times, 07 May 2015. Web. 10 May 2015.
The
article “After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye” by
Denise Grady reports about the treatment Dr. Ian Crozier after finding the
Ebola virus inside his left eye, which is the first instance that doctors are
aware of. Crozier was released from Emory University last October after
it was believed that he had been cured of ebola. However, two months later, Dr.
Steven Yeh removed some fluid from the inner chamber of his left eye after
Crozier complained of vision problems. He was alarmed to find that the fluid
was teeming with ebola. Fortunately, traces of the virus were not found in
Crozier’s tears or on the surface of his eye. Doctors immediately started
treatment, worried that the virus may harm his vision in both eyes permanently.
High doses of steroids worsened his vision in his left eye. The pressure of his
left eye, which had been alarmingly elevated, had plummeted quickly. Days
later, the iris of his left eye, which was blue, turned green. A steroid was
injected above his eye that would treat his eye. Gradually, his vision returned
and his eye turned blue again. Doctors have not confirmed if the drug had cured
Crozier.
Although this article was published last week, yesterday, Liberia
just declared that they were ebola free. It is concerning to me that Liberia
may be declaring victory too early. In light of this new development, doctors
now should take action in treating people who may still carry the virus in
their eyes. I hope this discovery brings new awareness to the world.
In this article, Grady describes the
steps that doctors took to cure Crozier and the effects that their treatment
had very well. The author also wrote about how these findings can be used in
the future. It is alarming that although some may believe that the epidemic is
starting to wane, there is the risk of people unknowingly carrying traces of
ebola.
Grady, Denise. "After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye." The New York Times. The New York Times, 07 May 2015. Web. 10 May 2015.
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Evelyn's review of the article, "After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye” by Denise Grady, was very well-written and to the point. In her first paragraph, Evelyn had a very good synopsis of the original article, illustrating the steps that were taken in treating Dr. Ian Crozier. She also had a very good connection in her second paragraph, bringing outside information about Liberia to support her opinions about how this affects the world. One last thing I thought Evelyn did well was summing up her response in her last sentence. She said, "It is alarming that although some may believe that the epidemic is starting to wane, there is the risk of people unknowingly carrying traces of ebola." It takes the research from the article and her own ideas and opinions to pull everything together. Some things I would suggest to make this response even better is to maybe put the author's opinions into her second paragraph because Evelyn said, "The author also wrote about how these findings can be used in the future." Another suggestion I have is to provide more information about how long the treatment really took. This article was published last week but they started treatment on Dr. Crozier two months after he was 'cured of ebola' in October. Evelyn then said that "Gradually, his vision returned and his eye turned blue again." I think she could have provided more specific information about where Dr. Crozier's condition is now and how long it took to get there. This article was quite shocking to me because this could be a very serious problem, possibly spreading ebola without people knowing.
Scott McGrath
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Current Event 10
Grady, Denise. "After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye." The New York Times. The New York Times, 07 May 2015. Web. 10 May 2015.
http://www.nytimes.com/2015/05/08/health/weeks-after-his-recovery-ebola-lurked-in-a-doctors-eye.html?ref=science&_r=0
This review by Evelyn of the article, "After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye," was extremely well done. It is a very interesting article that gives us a whole nother look at ebola's existence. Although some believe ebola is under complete control,we see that there has been a case of ebola very different to the others. A doctor has recently discovered the virus living in his left eye. I really like how she chose an article that was obviously very interesting and how he managed to keep the reader reading nonstop. One thing I wish she had done better though, was the first part of her first paragraph, at first I found it a little bit confusing and had to read over the first part many times. Another thing she really succeeded in doing was describing the article's main points very clearly. I knew exactly what I was supposed to know at the end of the review without even reading the article. Just something small that could be improved upon was saving her opinion for the opinionated section, it would keep the organization better. I also really like how she worded the paragraphs. I found this article very interesting and I was amazed to see that the deadly ebola virus had been found only in the doctors left eye.
Rachel Billings 5/10/15
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This review of the article “After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked In a Doctor’s Eye” by Evelyn was very interesting and informative. I really liked how she explained the steps the doctors took to try to cure Dr. Crozier and how she added the part about Liberia. I also liked how she wrote her review, it sounded very professional. Although I thought the part about Liberia was informative, I also didn’t like it because I felt like it took the attention away from the real focus of the article, which is Dr. Crozier’s condition. I also thought that evelyn could have added a little bit more of her opinion of the article. This review was good though. I haven’t really been keeping track of the whole ebola situation, so it was nice to get an update. Overall, I thought this review by Evelyn was very well-written and informative.
Grady, Denise. "After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye." The New
ReplyDeleteYork Times. The New York Times, 07 May 2015. Web. 10 May 2015.
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Evelyn's review of the article, "After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye” by Denise Grady, was very well-constructed, concise, and to the point. In her first paragraph, Evelyn had a very great synopsis of the original article, clearly showing the steps that were taken in treating Dr. Ian Crozier. In addition to her summary, she also had a very good connection in her second paragraph, bringing outside information about Liberia to support her opinions about how this affects the world. Another thing I thought Evelyn did well was summing up her response in her last sentence. Evelyn stated, "It is alarming that although some may believe that the epidemic is starting to wane, there is the risk of people unknowingly carrying traces of ebola." This statement takes the research from the article and her own ideas and opinions to tie everything together, that was very impressive. One suggestion I have is to provide more information about how long the treatment really took. This article was published last week but they started treatment on Dr. Crozier about two months after he was said to be ebola free in October. Evelyn then said that "Gradually, his vision returned and his eye turned blue again." I think she could have provided more specific information about where Dr. Crozier's condition is now and how long it took to get there. Another thing I would suggest to make this response even better is to maybe put the author's opinions into her second paragraph because Evelyn said, "The author also wrote about how these findings can be used in the future." Lastly, one thing that impressed me in Evelyn’s review was the amount of information she extracted from the article, as well as the amount of extra research she included. To conclude, this article was quite shocking to me because this could be a very serious problem, possibly spreading ebola without people knowing.
"After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye"
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The current event review of "After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye", written by Evelyn Kluemper was strongly written. In this review, Evelyn was successful with many writing methods. First, Evelyn did a great job in writing the summary of the article. The reader was able to understand what the article was about. Also, she brought up many great points about how people should be checking for the virus in the eyes. Lastly, Evelyn was successful with adding the current state of the Ebola virus. Although Evelyn had a strong review article, there are some aspects she could work on. When reading the last paragraph I did not really see a spot where Evelyn critiqued the author’s work. Also, she could have added how the virus affects her personal in the second paragraph. In this article, I was impressed to learn that the Ebola, even when cured, can still be found in the eyes. Overall, this article was very well written and informative.
Oliver Evison 5/13/15
ReplyDeleteGrady, Denise. "After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye." The New York Times. The New York Times, 07 May 2015. Web. 10 May 2015.
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Evelyn's review of the article, "After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye” by Denise Grady, was a great review overall. She had a very good connection in her second paragraph, bringing outside information about Liberia to support her opinions about how this affects the world. She also stated the facts very precisely and with flow. It is interesting to think that the virus hid in his eye. It takes the research from the article and her own ideas and opinions to pull everything together. I feel that some statistics would have really helped the Liberia paragraph. Knowing the percentages of ebola victims and how they became ebola free would be very interesting too. I think she could have provided more specific information about where Dr. Crozier's condition is now and how long it took to get there. This article was a big shock to me when I read it. You never know how and where you can bring a disease. All in all, this was a great review.
Grady, Denise. "After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye." The New York Times. The New York Times, 07 May 2015. Web. 10 May 2015.
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After reading Evelyn’s article, I was very well informed of ebola and how it is treated in some cases. In her response, I liked that she included a very detailed and in-depth summary of the article to give the reader a feel of what it was like. Evelyn brought up many very good points about how the ebola virus can be in many different places throughout the body, and that it should be checked in all body parts. I thought the way Evelyn ended her response with her main idea was very strong in reiterating her point, that ebola is very relevant. However, in her response it might have been more organized had she saved her opinions for the end of her response, rather than mixing them in throughout the paragraph. Also, Evelyn stated that the author wrote about the patient’s condition in the future and I would have liked to know about that rather than just hearing that the author talked about it. This response was very informative and taught me that ebola can be anywhere in any form.
Grady, Denise. "After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye." The New York Times. The New York Times, 07 May 2015. Web. 10 May 2015.
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After reading Evelyn's review on the article After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye, by Grady Denise, I feel as if I have obtained new information on Ebola itself, and how it is treated in specific ways. There were many thing Evelyn did extremely well when writing this review. One thing I thought Evelyn did extremely well was the way she ended her response with her main idea was very strong in reiterating her point, that ebola is very relevant. She also stated the facts very precisely and with flow, this allowed her piece to flow between ideas with no abrupt stops. Lastly, she had a very good connection in her second paragraph, bringing outside information about Liberia to support her opinions about how this affects the world. Although this piece was great, there is still room for improvement in certain areas. One thing Evelyn could have done to better the overall outcome, would be to put her thoughts and opinions in one specific part of the article, rather than scattered throughout, when scattered, it would have organized the paper as a whole. Another thing she could have done would have been to to provide more information about how long the treatment really took. Lastly the thing that impressed me most in the article, would have been Evelyn's ability to extract so much information from the article, and compartmentalize it into her smaller review. Overall, I think Evelyn did a great job when writing this piece.
Shannon Hendrick
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Core Chemistry
5.12.15
Evelyn's review of the article, "After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye” by Denise Grady, was very to the point, and allowed the reader to get a good sense of what the topic was about. I liked how Evelyn had a thorough explanation of the original article, showing the steps that were taken in treating Dr. Ian Crozier who suffered from Ebola. She also had a connection in her second paragraph that quickly caught my eye. The connection she had was from bringing outside information about Liberia to support her opinions about how this affects the world. I thought that by adding this information, it allowed the reader to compare and think about the article in a new and different way. Another thing I thought Evelyn did well on is her point about making sure that people begin to check for this disease in their eyes. This article is very well-written, however there is room for improvement. One suggestion I have is to explain better how long the treatment took for the doctor to be cured. Another thing I would suggest is to put the author's opinions, and researcher’s opinions into the first paragraph. If she did this, then the reader would get a good understanding for everyone’s ideas on this virus taking place and spreading. One thing that greatly interested me from her article is the fact that the iris of the doctor’s eye changed color. I’m not exactly sure why, but this part of the response really intrigued me. Overall, I think that evelyn did a great job on her response and that it is a very well written review of the article.
Grady, Denise. "After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye." The New
York Times. The New York Times, 07 May 2015. Web. 10 May 2015.
http://www.nytimes.com/2015/05/08/health/weeks-after-his-recovery-ebola-lurked-in-a-doctors-eye.html?ref=science&_r=0
Grady, Denise. "After Nearly Claiming His Life, Ebola Lurked in a Doctor’s Eye." The New York Times. The New York Times, 07 May 2015. Web. 10 May 2015.
ReplyDeletehttp://www.nytimes.com/2015/05/08/health/weeks-after-his-recovery-ebola-lurked-in-a-doctors-eye.html?ref=science&_r=0
In this article Evelyn really pulled in the audience by writing about a severe medical condition of a doctor. She wrote the review with suspense and in a reader friendly way which non-scientific people would understand. Evelyn also did a very good job using advanced vocabulary like, “the inner chamber of his left eye”. This gave the reader a better idea of the dilemma it caused the patient. Unfortunately, the author failed to bring in other outside information that might refute the findings of the doctors. She was also quick to presume that the antidote given was the one to clear this medical process. She needed more information to make it clear what the process of healing included. This article shows us that the disease ebola is still out there. The reader should never take for granted that even though this may not affect them directly it still has an impact on others.